Friday, July 1, 2011





Use one of the photos above to write a 200 word description on this environment - imagine you have visited one of these amazing locations! Remember to use descriptive vocabulary and techniques discussed in class. Happy writing team!

31 comments:

  1. Sunset
    I watch as the scorching hot sun goes down,the people quickly rush indoors as the light once again leaves their village.The sun slowly starts to fade. I'm not the only one watching it,i can slowly make out shapes of different animals sitting with their family's and friends,having a last glimpse at the sun before falling asleep.As time passes the warmth of the ground also starts to fade.Know im sitting their in a beautiful country that has suddently been taken over by the darkness.A chill goes down my spine,i hear movement in the bushes behind me.I can feel the little insects crawling underneath my legs desperitly trying to find warmth and shelter.I get up and slowly walk towards the little town,trying to avoid the sound coming from the bushes.I walk in between the little houses thinking of my own home back in New Zealand.These people may not have much,but that sunset showed me that they don't need fancy cars,or newly built homes to be happy.As long as they have hope they will always call this place their beloved home no matter what its like.
    Sohillah

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  2. Narnia- in summer
    The sun beams down on all the land’s creatures. The sun reflects its beauty on the clouds and combines their delicate charms. Narnia’s sunset is priceless as well as the beautiful array of plants and animals; not to mention flowers. Their world is unlike any other and it is a pity that tourists are not yet aware of the magnificent scenery waiting to relinquish its full power in autumn. Narnia is home to a distinguished variety of animals, each and every one unique in their own way; just like humans! Their abilities are further advanced than the human world animals and most can speak in at least two languages. Narnia is an extraordinary world beyond an ordinary wardrobe; each tree and each plant have vivid colours with distinct features. Not even an artist could dream up such a place.

    A gentle breeze blew swiftly through my hair and I forcefully sucked it through my nostrils. The stillness was overwhelming and I could literally feel the peace around me. I gazed at the shimmering sun of Narnia as it disappeared over the hills; good night, I whispered and stroked an animal beside me as I pulled my luggage over my shoulder and started the long journey home.
    Jamin -209 words- ;)

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  3. I am so very impressed ladies - you have definitely set the standard for this week very high. Well done and remember if you wish to send a writing entry to the Otago Times let me know by this Friday - happy writing! Mrs Y :-)

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  4. This morning I woke up to the sound of chirping birds in my bamboo hut , Then I shuffle slowly through the trees so i can admire the beauty of my unharmed , untouched forest. When i meet the edge of lake Paramount (par-a-mount) , I climb into my yellow and blue hot air balloon , I rise into the air and then it all comes to me , the sound of all of the animals talking in their own language among the granny smith apple green trees. I are now heading into unknown territory though , a desert , full of golden sand , then the sun scorches the sand and i see the colors fade to a light brown the color of tanned skin.
    After you land you can not see any of your civilization or bulky trees any where. you decide to stay there for a while though. then You see some strange vividly colored animals venture toward you , but they do not harm you. Then you decide to call them Sherkaraknics (sure-car-an-ics).
    (sunset picture)
    they seem to venture away when the massive , golden looking sun set , and you feel the sand cool down and the humidity in the air suddenly decreases insanely. When the sand returns to its usual golden state you sprint towards the basket of your vividly colored balloon , then you snatch out your "CRAZY CAMERA" and snap a picture of what looks like a fairy-tale sunset. the strange size of the arising moon is unusually big and you snap a photo of that too! then you continue watching the midnigh blue sky as puffy grey cluds fill the sky with spots of cold rain , then you climb into your basket and pull some of the heavy balloon over the top of the roomy basket to keep you dry.
    When the rain eventually stops you climb out and watch the now clear sky and study the glistening stars as a bug climbs onto your slightly damp shoulder covered in 100% cotton shirt.then you remember how lucky you are to have a environmentally friendly forest all to yourself!

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  5. P.S the last comment from me was about 270 words

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  6. Also so far there is some awesome comments I hope everyone ends up posting in time

    good luck!!

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  7. Jamin, I like your descriptive words and how you use our senses to influence your story writing- good work! (Jamin's Mum)

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  8. Awesome to have parents and caregivers reading our blog! Keep the comments and the descriptions coming in Room 10. I agree with Olivia and that we should work towards everyone posting their descriptions before Friday morning as we have a guest critic who is looking for the best entry ... Mrs Y

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  9. As I am leaving my hotel here in Tanzania, I see the most beautiful thing, its the sunset. you will never see such a sunset as beautiful as this one, it was so pretty. I couldn't help but stop and stare. Some huge lovely yaks walked pas, they just made the sunset look 10 times more beautiful. The bright yellow sun was almost down, its only a semi circle now i thought to myself. I sat down still looking at the beauty. The sky was bright red with a touch of calm orange.I took a deep breath and ran over to dad "dad dad look at the pretty picture its for sale $152" I had said "NO LETS JUST GO" dad had replied. We left for the airport I thought up a cunning plan. Dad looked away plan activated, now wheres the exit, there, wait I need money, haha theres dads wallet, swipe, run, run, run yes i made it out. I remember the hotel being just around the corner run run run run , made it , inside there it is " I would like to buy this picture" yay its mine now to run back to the hotel, run, run, run Ilooked at the gorgeous picture , dad never even noticed I was gone "where have you been" dad said.
    keziah

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  10. Tropical Jungle

    As I fall asleep I hear the soft blow of the wind, the trees brushing up against the next tree beside it. The water flows so quietly that it sounds like pouring a cup of water to the ground but it doesn’t hit the ground just it flowing down in front of you. I can also hear the birds flapping their wings like a person waving their top to get the dirt or the dust off of the old top the haven’t worn in a while. I can feel the spikes at the top of the grass when I drop my arm, and when I do so a slight breeze hits my face so softly that I can only just feel it. When I turn my head a brushing noise occurs, like in your bed turning to a different side of your body. I can smell fresh water like when you go to the supermarket and buy a fresh bunch of flowers for someone you love. It also smells like when you buy fresh vegetables that a slightly wet from someone giving them water. My mouth tingles like when you taste something new while I chew a ripe blueberry. Even though a Tropical Jungle might not feel like the place to be, as I fall asleep it feels like a destination I have dreamt about for my whole life.
    230 words
    Brianna

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  11. Sorry about the parts that dont make sence like *dust off of* *of* should not be there and the *the* in that sentence should be *that* and *fresh vegetables that a slightly*, the *a* should be an are.
    Brianna

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  12. well brianna, your deep detailed discription of your pic is amazing,you have come a long way with this.just remember to read your sentences to make sure correction of spelling & try to use every piece of the picture.
    briannas mum

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  13. Traveling to the next sunset…….
    The sun is settling over the horizon, India and her six animal friends are about to go to sleep for the next trip to begin. But India and her friends can’t stop watching the orange and yellow sky. They stop to have a glimpse at the sun slowly fading down to have a good night’s sleep. India and her six animal friends start to take a long nap ready for the next sun to rise. The bright yellow sun rose with a strong early burst of light the seven friends packed their things and started to walk the sandy path of the deserts road, for a one mile walk to the next location.
    Finally, India and her six animal friends arrived to a big rusty sign saying, “Hills of Sand”. The seven friends found a great hill that had a fantastic view ready for the sunset to begin. We settled down to a tall soft sizzling hill, down went the blue sky to a lovely warming sunset with an amazing shining sun to stand out of the orange darkened sky. India and her six animal friends gazed at the sunset with hopeful eyes of joy. Feeling hopeful to make it to their home town Christchurch.
    By Helena

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  14. The Forest:

    AHHHH! waking up to birds cherping and trees swaying what a perfect day to wake up to. Yesterday was a very very VERY cold day but i enjoyed waking up to day on a nice not to hot not to cold day. I got bored soon after i woke up so i thought of possible things i could do in this wonderful forest cover in trees with birds in them and bushes with insects i've never even heard of. I sat there thinking then i seen a lake not far ahead i ran and jumped into the most coldest river ever it nearly froze me so as quickly as i could i jumped right out of that freezing cold lake. I got bored again so i scavaged through my bag and found a pencil a eraser a paint brush a canvas and some paint and since it was a lovley sight i drew and drew and that is what it turned out to look like. Since im such a great artist i sold it and i got one thousand dollars just for that little painting. I went to alot of different countrys just to draw their land marks and sold them and when i grew up i was rich really rich.

    By Kris Giles

    Words:228.

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  15. In A Forest scatted With Wild Animals.........

    Imagine yourself stuck in the middle of nowhere with wild animals around you, staring at you, watching your every move as if you were their next meal. Now the only thing in your mind is RUN!! But you don’t, you just stand still and quiet. A few minuets later the animals back away with all eyes on you. It is a very hot day and you feel all your sweat coming down your head slowly. You have just realized that this land is scatted with vishes wild animals with families to feed and families that are hungry. It is getting hotter and darker at the same time. You are looking around and your head is now full of describing words about this place. All the words you had in mind has suddenly exploded out of your mouth. This place is so nice and hot with beautiful tropical trees. This like being in a paradise island (just with wild animals surrounded around me). You were stuck in a small tropical island with small and big wild animals. There is a very dark and dirty pound were hippo's lay with their heads raising upon the water with a yellow and black big hot air balloon that is floating over their heads getting higher and higher.

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  16. i have over 200 words =)

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  17. killer mi mi mi mi mammals everywhere . Nah but I'm am in dangerous grounds called the African out back.
    This is a beautiful place with grass everywhere and the birds and the bees and the flowers and the trees and a thing called pride . did you know that there was so much green and blue due to trees , grass and the water. I'm sure you will love it here.The green grass walks across the fields and the lions prow around with the tigers following them like guards . Then the birds watch from above like the cameras in your local mall,not to mention the many thousand deer that are killed in a week but the animals are clean and they only kill in the red zone just over 1 km square long and wide . The red zone is only the one place no one wants to go to,with the blood and all the tigers and leopards every inch L.O.L.Apart from that the landscape is only green and blue. Plus the hippos making a little bit of mud aka brown landscape.The parade is starting, the new king is born to fight the bravo newborn.they will go to this beautiful big clump of rocks lots of rock no grass. imagine it you with all this green blue and brown love the scenery smell me picture and watch the nature do its work.

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  18. as you can see in the bright shinning sky a magnificent balloon with me inside the wooden basket soaring over this magical summer experience in tanzanier lake with what it looks like a few hippos laying gently in the water as the sun hits around mid day and the trees are swaying so their must be a little gust of wind zoom past as a lion. the forest look like the contain dangerous and even the very gentle kind of animals like monkeys or lizards and dragonflies i say there is quite a lot going on right now in there but i tried the water you can see right now it is very dirty with mud and very very chilly cold and you can't see this but there is a hippo on it's back and it's rubbing it's head on the ground it looks so funny but from my view from the balloon i can see lots of animals and beautiful shapes that the trees are

    well sorry cant talk any more bye

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  19. As I stepped out of the black marone aerodynamic jumbo jet I saw the ture picture of the country Africa.I got out my purple sony nx125 camera out of my dark red leather nike bag to take a picture of this beautiful and unbelievable sight.I put the camera next to my hazel spiky eyes and looked through the stanless glass screen,I saw the dark orange sky and the yellow florisent sun as it takes its next jonery around the world again.One of the male baffalow saw the glare from my camera and looked at me like it was a male model ready to take hisn first photo to becaming known around the world.I struggled to get into the right position to take this rare moment I forgot to turn on my sony nx125 camera,so then I squinted at the tiny and very hard to see print,to find where to turn on the camera.Then I remembered that I had a book with bigger writing in it.Then I finally found where the on button was,then as was about to take the picture the piolet said that we had to go I didn't take the picture but I have that memory of it and I can recall it any time I want to.

    by Liban

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  20. (Sunset)When i woke up in the morning i stood up on my window and then i was very surprise i saw the most beautiful sunset and the sun was very shiny,as shiny as a gold and i also saw the the sky it was orange and a little bit of yellow in the middle and there are some animals coming through.Then i remember that my dad has a camera so i call my dad and said "dad dad DAD can u please come to my room and take a picture of this sunset?" "sure,coming" when dad was in my room and saw that wonderful sunset he said "wow that is the most beautiful sunset i ever seen in my whole life" then after that my dad take a picture on the sunset.Then after that when he's done he said "I'll print this up and give it you" i said "thanks dad".I was still starring at the sunset it was so beautiful and also the animals suddenly the animals run and the sunset was gone i was really sad.My dad came and gave me the picture it was good but i think that the real one is better than this picture but at least i have a picture of a sunset.

    by:Micah

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  21. This beautiful sunset is on the western side of Tanzania, Planet Gilmore. This planet has eight bright moons but not in the picture and only one of the 4 suns. The animals in the picture are called Buksha and live up to 777,777 years old. The ink and mud is what the ground is made from. The water is really sweet sweeter then sugar alone. There is even sweet pools filled with honey and syrups so sweet that eight liters even isn't enough. The animals that live in Tanzania have skin so tough that not even the sharpest thing in the universe cant pierce through it only strips of bacon fired from banana mans mouth. The trees are covered in the sweetest fruit and leaves that you can never get enough. The other animals consist of Deaglaphonts(Dogs eagles and elephants), Eaglatons(Griffons) and crocodales(crocodiles dogs and whales).The animals are mixed species and are super rear in other countries or galaxies. the grass is as gold as copper and the suns are like giant orange lollipops floating among the stars. The tree bark is as dull as a foggy night out in the middle of a stormy sea.

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  22. I think these descriptions are really detailed and can be used in debating etc. So we should do these kind of descriptions more often.:D:P:D:P:D

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  23. Mama Mia, Tanzania is way different to NZ, do you want to know why? Okay, just look at the picture, compared to NZ,NZ has houses that are made out of bricks. But Tanzania has houses too, but different materials they use. Tanzania houses are made out of those bush, woods and branches. And also look at the land, lots and lots of bushes, people hunt for animals in bushes as well (but don't know wwhy). Look at the animals, they look beautiful because they are my favourite animal. I wish I had one of those animals, but too big, for example, an elephant, HALEJULLAH! a one big animal, don't want that as a pet, (might squash my house) and don't want to clean that gigantic poop. Well moving on about what it feels like. If your in Tanzania, what does it feel like? I reckon it feels hot, and noisy (by animals). I wish I was in Tanzania, if i did, it will be a dream come true. Tanzania will be a good place to live, (I guess) because people are friendly, foods looks nice, hunting looks fun and swimming is awesome, or Tanzania won't be a good place to live. DUM DUM DUM.
    Vehar

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  24. Awesome work Room 10 - keep encouraging your family members and whanau to comment on our writing.
    Congratulations to Jamin and Brianna, our guest critic (Chris Archbold) selected their writing examples as the most descriptive! Well done! Big thank you to Chris for judging our posts - stay posted for next week's guest critic ...
    Hopefully the remaining posts will be made this weekend. Stay safe and see you all on Monday. Mrs Y x

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  25. The beautiful sunset...
    As I watch the beautiful sparkle in the sunset made me wonder ,how beautiful life is,how much joy it is to be in this world ,it made me think about so many things as if its telling me something.I don't no what it meant but it felt so important, like I needed to no what it was telling me or even if it was telling me something.I get up off the grass and star walking back home , every second I look back at the sunset I see no difference and turn around again.I hear Mum calling me for dinner I run look back and I see a smile I stare,"Frances hurry up we are waiting" mum calls i run, once i get home mum asks what I was doing I replied "oh just thinking" she says OK ,lets eat .After dinner I get ready for bed , I sit down and think about the sunset , I keep on having flashes about it just pooping in my head every second , I lose sight I scream next thing I remember I'm on the ground.Next morning I'm in the hospital my family's around me , I get the sunset stuck in my head I scream again ... TO BE CONTINUED ...

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  26. I've been here for 2 weeks and the scenery is amazing from my hotel.Coming back from the packed city the most beutifulest thing is happening right in front of my eyes a slow calm sunset with bisons walking along.In the morning you dont need an alarm because of all of the chirping of the birds and the sceams of the monkeys and the roars of the lions,tigers and elephants.It's coming up to 3 weeks so I go treking in the jungle with an expert of the jungle he knows this whole jungle with his eyes closed the expert Anthony said "get your Machetes out its starting to get bushy.the green bushes and leaves surround us we were cutting down anything and everything that got in our way.Me and Anthony didnt realy talk much because he could only speak little english.I keep an timer on I checked and it said 3hrs 26mins and 12secs then I checked my pedometer and it said i've walked 15,845 steps so far.Now we walk back to my hotel for a nice cold drink and a long sleep ready for my flight in the morning.

    by Zac

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  27. -ann-
    I've been to africa for 9 week..
    all they is boring and mom and dad is always busy.. so I'm play with animal all day.
    But I sow really ammazing sunset one day.. my mom said you saw sunset because you like here.
    Then I was think about that , and suddenly I remamber it that when I came here for first day. I didn't saw that when I was been here..
    now I love Africa and now I'm living here..
    and I'm helping people to living right..

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  28. But I need to lived here again.. and people will upset when I'm gone I was so warried about that I'm go back to my contry.. and.. and.. peoples heart.. it was really sad when I think that..
    really sad..
    The futer was hurrible and I can't tell to anyone.. so I was think my friend.. so I went to my african friends house and he said I know the answer.. I was think that answer, when I was back home I was think I need to go back but I will go back when I will saw that sunset again...
    My friend was right I was know the answer..
    4YEARS later I saw that sunset again and I remmember that I WAS primise to go back so I say all of my friends to good bye and I was go long way of my house. -ann-

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  29. This is a picture I took while crossing Zambezi river in Africa.I haven't seen so many hippoes in one place at the same time in my life. On both banks of the river was so thick that you can hardly see through it. The trees are so thick that you have to stay on the track to get through the bush. To have a better view of the surrounding area you could go ballooning. In a nice weather it would be great to have a safari .There is so many wild animals in the nearby jungle around the river. The grass is so tall that you can hide and film the wild life absolutely unnoticed for many hours. So I took a last look at the picture I took. I will never forget about that moment,trees,hippoes and the beautiful river. Hopefully I could go there again.


    Alexander

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